Patrick+and+Sharon-+The+Unwritten+Books

[|Sharon's blog]
 * Individual Work:**

[|Patrick's blog]

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(*We had to join the space in order to write on discussion tab, so we will just write it here) //(Sharon//)
 * Self Assessment:**

The purpose of this project was to inform the world about young children who are suffering from leukemia. This project was to tell people that leukemia is curable with modern medicines and with a little bit of hope. As a healthily living students and people, we can give those young patient hope that they can be cured.
 * What specific purpose or "change for the better" are you hoping to accomplish with this product?**

I think the most effective detail in this project was me who have been cured from leukemia. I am an alive proof that shows leukemia is curable disease.
 * What do you think is/are the most effective detail(s) for achieving your purpose?**

The weakest aspect of the project was that due to technical difficulties, our voices were not clear enough or too soft to hear.
 * What do you think is the weakest aspect of your project?**

I think the video with our voice recorded would help us the most to spread our message. It's because voice sets up mood and seriousness of our wants to spread the message to the world. Also, song and pictures with our voices would help people to get emotional and give a little attention to our message.
 * What 21st century tools (yes, we're talking "web 2.0"--wikis, blogs, YouTube, etc) do you think could help you to spread your message or idea to the world? How would you picture using these to increase your power to make a difference?**

My first draft and second draft had slight different topics that it is hard for me to determine if adding figurative language had big effect on my paper. However, I think adding figurative language helped to visualize the sick children's life and what I was trying to say. For example, "hospital is like the prison..." shows like prisoners, those young children stay in the hospital for years and years, almost locked up, not able to go anywhere. Next time, I want to remember, including figurative language will have great effect on my reader because it creates story and shows my message clearly.
 * Discuss what you see when you compare your first draft (solo), which did not require figurative language (analogies, metaphors, etc), with your second one. Be specific. Tell yourself, and us, what you want to remember the next time you write something you want to have an effect on your reader.**


 * Self Assessment -- Patrick Nam**

There are little kids in this world, that are suffering so much, without having been able to properly enjoy the life they were gifted with. When things are up to a point where they just want to all give up, we should be able to be beside them... Our little gift of Hope could make a world's difference.
 * What specific purpose or "change for the better" are you hoping to accomplish with this product?**

The fact that Sharon suffered leukemia when she was much younger. A living proof that leukemia is curable. A lving symbol of hope for the child and parents alike.
 * What do you think is/are the most effective detail(s) for achieving your purpose?**

The voiceover was a bit patchy in some places, due to technical difficulties...
 * What do you think is the weakest aspect of your project?**

Our actual voices calling out for the nothing big. Just a little love and some caring. It maybe only something little for us, but surely not for the ones that need it. Help from Fate will guide us with this cause.
 * What 21st century tools (yes, we're talking "web 2.0"--wikis, blogs, YouTube, etc) do you think could help you to spread your message or idea to the world? How would you picture using these to increase your power to make a difference?**

As I have only written one, my required figurative language has not been altered.
 * Discuss what you see when you compare your first draft (solo), which did not require figurative language (analogies, metaphors, etc), with your second one. Be specific. Tell yourself, and us, what you want to remember the next time you write something you want to have an effect on your reader.**